Silence was the theme for the night
Violence of violins was the first delight
Violence of violins was the first delight
Hurt harps joined the terrible serenade
Blurting his thoughts like a grim grenade
Guitars began singing tunes of guilt
Sitars sounding his lost hope's wilt
Dreaded drums echoing sad dreams
Shredded santoors sighing in screams
Tormented tablas of rhythmic beat
Torn apart in the grief of his defeat
Flutes flaunting faulty fanatic tunes
Mute memories buried in time's dunes
Pain painted by piano's performance
Slain smiles severed in vile penance
Cruised confusions of past left forlorn
Bruised bugles blared their last tone.
(This poem is not in Iambic pentameter, as I am yet to learn to adhere to the syllabic rules)
Prompted by FormForAll - Framed Couplets by Beachanny at dVerserPoetsPub.
Blurting his thoughts like a grim grenade
Guitars began singing tunes of guilt
Sitars sounding his lost hope's wilt
Dreaded drums echoing sad dreams
Shredded santoors sighing in screams
Tormented tablas of rhythmic beat
Torn apart in the grief of his defeat
Flutes flaunting faulty fanatic tunes
Mute memories buried in time's dunes
Pain painted by piano's performance
Slain smiles severed in vile penance
Cruised confusions of past left forlorn
Bruised bugles blared their last tone.
(This poem is not in Iambic pentameter, as I am yet to learn to adhere to the syllabic rules)
Prompted by FormForAll - Framed Couplets by Beachanny at dVerserPoetsPub.
What a great use of the form. You have certainly given it life and fun with your use of musical narrative. This really works well.
ReplyDeletereally good man...you played the form well and really set the scene as well for the music...music has such a way of moving me and is such a part of my life....i like this...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian!
DeleteMusic sure does play a very important role in our lives. I wonder how boring this world would be without music.
i hate to imagine a world without music honestly....it def plays a large role in mine...hope you are doing well...
DeleteThe frames here hold the sounds and alliteration on every line creates its own kind of music. The frames are perfect, but I think you could manage the rhythms as well. A band without percussion, however, is clearly music and you have made a lot of it here.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much!
DeleteExcellent take on the framed couplet form, and tip of the hat to the way you weaved your musical theme.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Samuel!
Deleteenjoyed this read a lot.. and as i comment, my mind makes music
ReplyDeleteLovely piece of art :)
ReplyDeleteI didn't get the "silence" part.
ReplyDeleteBut the alliterations of the orchestra were a fun read.