Creatures of the day are sleeping..
Creatures of the night are peeping..
Its a dark and silent night.
The dry leaves are rustling..
The cool wind is whistling..
Its a cool and quiet night.
All of a sudden, there is a spark..
Sky is filled with clouds - huge and dark..
Its begun to drizzle.
Show of lightening and thunder..
Tearing the calmness asunder..
Things changed like a ruffled puzzle.
Now the strong scary wind growls..
As scared street dog howls..
Here comes the scornful storm!
To its mighty force, the trees dance..
Blurred is everything, within a glance..
Nature has taken its fearful form.
Submitted as part of Thursday Poets Rally 47
Great build up to the coming storm. Your words create a tension that fits the subject very well. "Show of lightening and thunder..
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—really like the above transitional passage just after the drizzle. Nice work.
nice...i love a good storm...to stand in awe at its mighty power...you lead into that well and what a great picture to end on...
ReplyDeleteCreatures of the day are sleeping..
ReplyDeleteCreatures of the night are peeping..
Its a dark and silent night.
very well done.
:)
i almost felt it.
ReplyDeleteGreat Job....
Great images in this and like the background drops nice touch.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery, I love the mounting intensity
ReplyDeleteThe opening was mysterious and bit sinister--nice build up before the storm and rain.
ReplyDeleteGreat build up to a sight one could imagine through your words. :)
ReplyDeleteNice coinage of words...great poetry.
ReplyDeleteLovely written and beautiful pictures too
ReplyDeleteLike this.
Best wishes
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ReplyDeleterustling whistling
hahaha
Great flow and tempo Umesh, really enjoyed the character of nature here. Wonderful write! ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteeverything fits here. the words, the visuals... it all made for a movie in my imagination!
ReplyDeleteIt's very dramatic. Do you write screenplays? Looks like you have talent for screenplays. I like the pix too. I like how I didn't see the pix till after I read the poem, and it gave a cool effect. It made me think, "Yeah, those go along!!"
ReplyDeleteNo no :) I don't write screenplays.Just write some poems once in a while.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the visit and the comment :)
this is amazing.
ReplyDeletebrilliant one.
Excellent painting of a storm coming then there!
ReplyDeletelove it. i love that time waiting with baited breathe for it to unleash. this is a perfect picture of it.
ReplyDeleteInteresting how nature transforms from a picture of serenity into one so violent and fearsome. Enjoyed this. :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem - when i see lightning and storms i am reminded of a magician sitting in the clouds waving his wand and the thunder is like a loud applause:))
ReplyDeleteVery nice imagery...I love the awakening of a storm and reading your words carried me through the experience in my imagination magically.
ReplyDeleteI am aware of your tension before the coming storm!
ReplyDeleteFantastic imagery. The stillness as vivid and palpable as the storm upon it arrival. Very nice writing!
ReplyDeletewell expressed tension,
ReplyDeleteCheers.
The imaginary and your words creates a visual representation of your poem.Liked it
ReplyDeleteI saw and felt the entire scene so vividly. Well done.
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ReplyDeleteWoW! Love the opening lines...the buildup...then bam, storm hits!
Awesome imagery!
Thanks for sharing.
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Such a gentle beginning to build to the explosive end. Excellent job in increasing the tension all the way through.
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