Wednesday 29 June 2011

The Fantastic Fall

He was clinging to confusion's cliff
With the tightest possible grip
As his body began to go stiff
His hands began to rip.

To his luck , he found  a thread
He thought of  holding on to it
Only realizing its a serpent instead
After he was severely bit

He prefers to fall silently
Towards the sea of reality
Swaying in the wind gallantly
 He discovers his inner serenity. 







Prompted by : Three Word Wednesday CCXLV

Submitted for : One Shot Wednesday 


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Location: Bengaluru, Karnataka, India

19 comments:

  1. Pat HattWednesday 29 June 2011 at 11:34:00 GMT-7

    Great rhyming scheme and we all need to sometimes let go and just jump on in. Nicely stated.

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  2. ClaudiaWednesday 29 June 2011 at 11:56:00 GMT-7

    sometimes letting go is the best we can do....love the pics - they underline your words perfectly

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  3. Brian MillerWednesday 29 June 2011 at 13:14:00 GMT-7

    i agree with claudia...we cling tightly sometimes tot he wrong things letting go only after the serpent has bit us...

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  4. Umesh RaoWednesday 29 June 2011 at 21:13:00 GMT-7

    Completely agree with you Claudia.Letting go is sometimes the best we can do.

    But we realize that we were wrong only after the serpent of reality has bit us.

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  5. UnknownThursday 30 June 2011 at 05:44:00 GMT-7

    Lovely flow and rhyme. A beautiful message of letting go. ~ Rose

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  6. AnonymousThursday 30 June 2011 at 06:08:00 GMT-7

    Yes, sometimes we cling on so tight because of fear, we miss so many golden chances if we'd had the courage to take that leap of faith.
    Good writing. Thanks for visiting me.

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  7. AnonymousFriday 1 July 2011 at 14:55:00 GMT-7

    Great weaving of words!

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  8. AnonymousFriday 1 July 2011 at 20:23:00 GMT-7

    Rhyming and beautiful :)

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  9. moondustwriterSaturday 2 July 2011 at 17:18:00 GMT-7

    Great pics to make this poem pop
    I feel the tension, daring to release and the freedom. a rather spiritual experience

    thanks for sharing with One Stop celebration

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  10. Dorianna Ric (paintswithwords)Sunday 3 July 2011 at 23:46:00 GMT-7

    Enjoyable read...nice rhyme and great conceptualization

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  11. UnknownSaturday 9 July 2011 at 10:26:00 GMT-7

    breath taking, well done.

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  12. UnknownSaturday 9 July 2011 at 10:26:00 GMT-7

    Invite you to write for week 5 challenge,
    Hope all is well.
    Thanks for the attention.
    Appreciate your input.
    Cheers.

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  13. Umesh RaoSaturday 9 July 2011 at 10:29:00 GMT-7

    Thanks for the comment and the invite.
    The picture prompt is very cute and sweet. Will surely write :)

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  14. DPMonday 11 July 2011 at 09:28:00 GMT-7

    Really amazing!!

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  15. K. Shawn EdgarSunday 16 October 2011 at 23:45:00 GMT-7

    Leap of leaps. The faith, the flow, the freedom in these lines have wings.

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  16. Pat-Mather Brown Gordon-ceton Monday 17 October 2011 at 06:45:00 GMT-7

    vivid imagery on letting go.

    thanks.

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  17. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryMonday 17 October 2011 at 19:05:00 GMT-7

    breath taking,

    love it.

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  18. Ann LeFloreWednesday 19 October 2011 at 18:24:00 GMT-7

    at times we have no other choice but to let go so nicely done and amazing write
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/mirror-of-truth/

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  19. Hyde Park Poetry PalaceSaturday 22 October 2011 at 12:24:00 GMT-7

    the images are very attractive,
    powerful expression.
    :)

    join us today.

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