I wait, at the end of the tunnel
For my light to guide me out
To find myself in life's funnel
I wait, at the end of the tunnel
As thoughts seem void and null
Shackled to the chains of doubt
I wait, at the end of the tunnel
For my light to guide me out
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Posted for FormForAll - Triolets at dVersePoetsPub hosted by Samuel Peralta.
Thank you Sam for introducing to this wonderful form of poetry!
"A triolet has eight lines, with rhyme scheme ABaAabAB. The first, fourth and seventh lines are identical, and the second and final lines are also identical.This means that, once you've written the first couplet, you have five of the eight lines done. With only three more lines to go, you’re 63% done with the poem."
nice...love how the waiting for the light to lead you out plays on those doubts...nice triolet man
ReplyDeletethank you so much Brian :)
DeleteI can't help thinking that this poem is about birth... Good triolet!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sam.
DeleteI had never imagined it to be about birth but after your comment I realize it is so much in sync with the process of birth. Thanks for the wonderful insight.
Good one, I like the tunnel metaphor.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI enjoyed the repetition. It gave it a lyrical quality, enjoyed :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!
DeleteThank you so much!
ReplyDeleteNice poem!enjoyed....
ReplyDeleteThank you Sreeja!
DeleteOnce again....its all hope here....
ReplyDeleteor maybe the light will just guide you in
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excellent triolet. Great use of repetition indeed. Middle stanza really hit home for me. Strong piece. Thanks
ReplyDeleteThank you Fred :)
DeleteTwice I have gone down the Tunnel of Light, and each time argued with the gatekeeper there that I had not yet done the work I came to do. Each time I was allowed to return -- once from an inexplicable coma after a broken jaw received in a soccer accident, once from "incurable" cancer.
ReplyDeleteContrary to your poem -- and the experience of the first of my three births -- the greatest light in my experience was inside the tunnel, drawing me to a brighter world beyond death. A dazzling world that tempted me.
But we are so little alive, and so long dead. And I really enjoy incarnation! So I have always so far returned to try again...