Wednesday 9 March 2011

So Close Yet So Far

We were so close
Yet there wasn't a blossom of love's rose
I tried my best to go far
yet my heart's door for her is always ajar

Now I know what addiction is
I feel it in all the sweet moments I miss
My life could have been the best
But destiny wanted my joys to be at rest

The source of my smile is fading
Through the streams of tears I keep on wading
The hope will never be lost
Coz in my heart she is forever frost

So close yet so far
Just like the night sky's bright little star
For her I will keep waiting like the moon
With hopes that she will change her mind soon :)

Submitted for Poetry Potluck Week 46 : “Love and its not being there”


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23 comments:

  1. ClaudiaTuesday 3 May 2011 at 22:11:00 GMT-7

    aww - hope as well she will change her mind and the flowers will start to blossom...heartfelt write umesh..

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  2. Brian MillerWednesday 4 May 2011 at 12:19:00 GMT-7

    yes i know that addiction as well...and i toohold out hope for you...

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  3. AnonymousWednesday 4 May 2011 at 12:48:00 GMT-7

    upon reading your beautiful words i hope with all my heart that she will change her mind soon...as your words travel through the air, time and space and up to the stars...may those stars shine down on her and into your eyes...lovely poem...tugging on my heart strings and then some...

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  4. AnonymousThursday 5 May 2011 at 09:04:00 GMT-7

    Aww... how sweet... and so beautifully written! It actually read like a song...
    On the shoulder of hope, resides the weight of the world indeed... (sigh)

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  5. The PoetThursday 5 May 2011 at 14:45:00 GMT-7

    A lovely write...don't give up hope.

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  6. SukruthFriday 6 May 2011 at 10:58:00 GMT-7

    Wish you good :)

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  7. PurviThursday 2 June 2011 at 09:36:00 GMT-7

    Oh my.. I thought, it was him I was reading.. just replace a few words here and there.. and it is like he was speaking.. Well said.

    Puplumages is Purvi :)
    I am from ~
    http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/05/27/laments-on-the-loss-of-love/

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  8. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallThursday 2 June 2011 at 10:59:00 GMT-7

    sing-song alike word flow.
    perfect rhyming as well...

    well done.
    ;)

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  9. AnonymousFriday 3 June 2011 at 07:37:00 GMT-7

    I have felt this heartache unrequited love, being, the friendship trap I wouldn't wish it on anyone. Beautifully depicted, you could really feel the melancholy, the pain

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  10. AnonymousSunday 5 June 2011 at 17:04:00 GMT-7

    Unrequited love ... so painful. Beautifully written. Thanks for sharing :)

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  11. UnknownWednesday 8 June 2011 at 07:26:00 GMT-7

    Wonderfully composed piece. The emotions ring through your words and make great poetry ~ Rose

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  12. Liz Rice-SosneWednesday 8 June 2011 at 21:37:00 GMT-7

    This is very lovely and sweet ... but why "worthless words?" I think that your words are valuable.

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  13. AnonymousThursday 16 June 2011 at 18:35:00 GMT-7

    sweet and created magic over my mind :)

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  14. AnonymousSunday 31 July 2011 at 20:31:00 GMT-7

    so sad and emotional. it takes you along and sweeps you with it.

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  15. KayMonday 1 August 2011 at 03:21:00 GMT-7

    Har ek ka apana samay hota hai. Achchhe samay ki asha rakhiye! Adbhut lekhak :)

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  16. Umesh RaoMonday 1 August 2011 at 08:37:00 GMT-7

    @lunawitch15 Thanks for the visit and the comment :)

    @Kay Dhanyawad :)

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  17. AnonymousMonday 1 August 2011 at 09:46:00 GMT-7

    Love the last stanza. Waiting might not be the answer...

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  18. AnonymousMonday 1 August 2011 at 13:40:00 GMT-7

    this is almost--not quite, I'm sure--as painful to read as it must have been to write. I don't know if I would wait ver long.
    Nice writing.

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  19. Shashidhar SharmaTuesday 2 August 2011 at 02:37:00 GMT-7

    Hope ... is the only thing left, when a loved one has left... and this hope brings on to take step after step in living... and it keeps the optimism alive.. I liked your verse... and may your wishes come true...
    Thanks for sharing..

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/05/whispers.html

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  20. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryTuesday 2 August 2011 at 17:37:00 GMT-7

    blessings, another door will open up when one closes.

    amazing expressions, thanks for sharing.

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  21. Ann LeFloreTuesday 4 October 2011 at 21:48:00 GMT-7

    hold tight to hope and hope will change and allow the flowers to bloom again
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/

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  22. AnonymousThursday 6 October 2011 at 15:15:00 GMT-7

    a sad yet sweet piece!

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  23. Shashidhar SharmaFriday 7 October 2011 at 00:06:00 GMT-7

    Its good to revisit it again through Poetry Picnic WK 7.



    Thanks for sharing. Look forward to your entry in the coming poetry picnic week 8 theme “Friends, relationship… ”

    Shashi

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html

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